Draft 2.
My hair says so much about him
Give me a colour-blind minister
who won’t let crimson streaks
tempt him to say
as he shakes my hand
at the chapel door
You look like a punk.
Who won’t have to smile
to show it’s a joke
and neither will I
as I walk away
grateful he’s highlighted
something I’ve long suspected.
Draft 1
Her hair says so much about him
Blessed be the colour-blind minister
who won’t be tempted
by crimson streaks
to say to a fortyish woman
after the Eucharist
You look like a punk.
He won’t have to smile
to show it’s a joke
and neither will she
as she walks away
grateful he’s highlighted
something she’s long suspected.
I think I get it. Do colour-blind people see crimson as green? Not sure about the title. Why?
Thanks, Martin. Didn’t realise it wasn’t clear. I’ve included a second draft in the original post.