Toast
Leaves fall, crisp and brown,
curling up at the edges,
littering the lawn.
Toast
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Toast
Leaves fall, crisp and brown,
curling up at the edges,
littering the lawn.
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Perhaps ‘curl at the edges’ would more suit the metre?
That is a very unexpected image. Most interesting.
Of course, Martin, I’m looking for 7 syllables in this line.
put me out of my misery – why is it called toast?
Three reasons, no less, Sarah:
1. The fallen leaves (crisp and brown, curling up at the edges) look like toast.
2. Ever heard the expression “You’re toast” – meaning you’ve had it? The poor old leaves are past their best, you see – useless.
3. I wrote the poem over breakfast, looking out at the leaves littering the lawn. Guess what I was eating!
Perhaps a toast-related word to replace ‘littering’ – just to reinforce the idea.
oooh – thanks for the explanation that helps